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Two Fragments of A Deep Wound by ~discontentbeauty:icondiscontentbeauty:



I.


I saw you run
after her.
Your precious snow-peaks loomed
in the background
   - I was back there too-
You chased her tears
with your sympathy.
There was an aching in your
heart and perhaps
in your loin,
but who am I
to say what really went on?
I saw you reach out and caress her
pale skin,
a single tear fell from her cheek -
you let it fall and
it pounded into the earth.
A deep tremor echoed through
body, soul, and heart
and I felt it 3,000 miles away.
I heard it too,
early in the morning
I sprang forward from the mattress;
you seemed to fall backward
if only a little.


II.


After you faltered
you realized your mistake.
This is what I did not see
and all I could feel
was your betrayal.
The past quickly vanished and I
suddenly! was more than your backdrop,
I became more than some
sexual ball and chain.
The letters
l
o
v
e
in "lover"
became illuminated,
but I still couldn't see anything
until the day I saw you again -
it was more than I could imagine
and all that I needed to see.
©2008-2009 ~discontentbeauty
:icondiscontentbeauty:

Author's Comments

Sometimes romance isn't so majestic.




EDIT

I finally thought of a decent title as I'm making myself submit to [link]


With that said and the title given, there needs to be more to this. They will be different poems. This was a very difficult situation for me to deal with and I still harbor questions, anger, sadness, and so many other emotions. There will be more to this, but for now please let me know what you think of the title.

:D

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:iconpoetic-obituary:
can't help you with the title.
But I think, for what it's worth, it ends perfectly. It runs perfectly too, no mistakes here.
At all.
I wouldn't change it too much if I were you... but then again... I'm not.

--
~Kurdt.
:icondiscontentbeauty:
thanks :D ....are you sure it doesn't end too abruptly?? that is what im worried about.

--
We're all pawns, my dear.
:kitty:


GO HERE ----> [link]
:iconpoetic-obituary:
it ends fine. Believe me.

--
~Kurdt.
:iconsombermuse:
I love this, it 'illuminates' somethings I have been thinking about recently with my rocky romance life lol.

beautiful writing as always =)

--
i tend to wander down the wrong rabbit hole quite frequently. :boogie:
:icondiscontentbeauty:
haha...i love your choice of words. it is more than fitting.


thanks a ton. :yum:

--
We're all pawns, my dear.
:kitty:


GO HERE ----> [link]
:icondiscontentbeauty:
okay, thanks. sorry i had to ask twice... i was just really unsure! :phew:

--
We're all pawns, my dear.
:kitty:


GO HERE ----> [link]
:iconsombermuse:
=) :glomp:

--
i tend to wander down the wrong rabbit hole quite frequently. :boogie:
:iconbitterlysweet:
I think it's perfect
:icondiscontentbeauty:
thank you....i was so unsure of the title.

--
We're all pawns, my dear.
:kitty:


GO HERE ----> [link]

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